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Here's a snippet from a scene towards the middle of Spinster's Folly:
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Bill saw Marie saddle her horse and ride up toward the tree line, but he was obliged to stay where he was, stacking the last of the logs alongside of Chico Henderson.
"Don't you wish you could fork a horse and follow Miss Marie?" Chico asked in an undertone, his grin almost splitting his face.
Bill knocked hard against Chico's shoulder, the one that had been wounded.
"Ow! There's no call for that, Henry."
"Keep your mouth buttoned. I don't want to hear your palaver."
"Where'd you get that burr under your blanket?" Chico taunted. "Ain't she been taking notice of you?"
"That's no concern of yours. Get back to work. These logs don't get stacked by magic."
Chico subsided, but he chuckled, and the sound rankled.
No, she ain't spoke a word to me since she returned from down south. She's been short of smiles, as well. Somethin's wrong.
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Love your use of the period language; it always adds color to your writing. And now I'm wondering what's wrong with her too! Great sample!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna. I appreciate your comment. I'd better get this book finished!
DeleteI love the banter between these two. And something does seem amiss ... definitely intriguing!
ReplyDeleteChico is a good friend to Bill, even when he's teasing him so brutally (this is nothing!). Thanks, Sarah.
DeleteLoved your word usage! I haven't seen the word "palaver" used in ever so long. Great sample!
ReplyDeleteSandra, "palaver" is one of those great words that puts the reader instantly into the right time and place. I love when that happens. Thanks for your comment!
DeleteSomethings missing, why she's behaving the way she is
ReplyDeleteYep, some little thing went badly off plan. There's no controlling the actions of others. Makes life interesting. Thank for visiting, Lindsay!
DeleteLove that last paragraph! Great sample!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sharon! A lack of smiles can sour a man's day. :-)
DeletePoor Bill. It's hard when you love someone who ignores you.
ReplyDeleteIt's really heartbreaking, isn't it? Whew! Poor Bill. Thanks for commenting, Dianne!
DeleteYou really know how to put us in another time! Wonderfully done!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jennifer! You really know how to warm the cockles of my heart! All you gals are so good to me.
DeleteNicely done with the period language, lady.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Gunnar! You've got that knack, too. Thanks for visiting.
ReplyDeleteI love it! It is a fun exchange and a great hook. It gets me wondering about why she isn't smiling and what happened down south.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Rachel! I really need to finish this book.
DeleteLOL I like the exchange between them! But now I'm curious - what's wrong with Miss Marie?
ReplyDeleteThanks, Mirriam. She has several things go wrong in her life, but the novel is still in WIP status, so I guess we all have to wait a few months to find out.
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